Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided line graph depicts the information about using different kind of electric products nsuch as Washing machine ,Refrigerator,Vaccum cleaner and hours spent by households for cleaning from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that refrigerator surged rapidly and few flucations in washing machine. whereas,number of hours declined gradually.
After analyzing the data it can be observed Refrigerator was not in demand in 1920 the percentage was at 0 however,after 20 years it grown significantly of cuts the Vaccum cleaner in 1940 and almost reached with level of washing machine in 2019 it was on peak.While,washing machine journey begin from the high demand in recent years in the duration of 99 years in flucated in 2019 it comes roughly 65%.Whilst,vaccum cleaner also rose consequently from 1920 to 2000 it start growing continuously in the end it stablized at the highest percentage of graph
Furthermore, number of hours declined substantially in 1920 it commence with 50 hours pwe week in 2019 it came around 10 hours per week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliances and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For example, the description of the refrigerator's growth is confusingly phrased ('grown significantly of cuts the Vaccum cleaner'), and the data points are not always clearly or accurately reported. While the overall trend is identified, the comparison between the categories is not fully developed, and the lack of clear data points makes it difficult for the reader to follow the specific changes over the 99-year period. More attention to detail regarding the specific percentages and years would improve the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the abrupt transition 'While,washing machine journey begin'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which appliance is being discussed. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the overview from the detailed analysis, leading to a somewhat cluttered structure. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors (e.g., 'Vaccum', 'flucations', 'stablized'). The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is a lack of precision in describing trends. Phrases like 'surged rapidly' and 'declined gradually' are used, but they are often undermined by awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'journey begin' or 'cuts the Vaccum cleaner'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations for describing data, such as 'witnessed a steady increase' or 'reached a plateau'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect punctuation. Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, which hinders readability. For instance, 'Refrigerator was not in demand in 1920 the percentage was at 0' lacks necessary punctuation or conjunctions. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. Improving control over basic sentence construction and punctuation is essential before attempting more complex structures. Focus on ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb.
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