Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line bar show the chenge in amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country and electrical appliances between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, it is clear that in households with electrical appliances percentage high in 2019 but number of hours of housework per week high in 1920 .
starting with the in 1920 , 40 % use washing machine and the 30 % use refrigerator and 0% use vacuun cleaner . while , the in 1940 washing machine use 60% and refrigerator use by 50% and vacuum cleaner use by maximum near by 60%, . and the in 1960 use washing machine 60 % and same refrigetor use and with vacuum cleaner 90% . Futher the in 1980 washing machine by use maximum 65% and refrigerator use 90 % with vacuum cleaner 100% use , the in 2000 washin machi8ne use by maximum 70% use and refrigerator and vacuum use 100 % and the last in 2019 washing machine use by maximum 75% and refrigenator and vacuum cleaner use 100%.
on the other hand, in number of hours of housework per week , in 1920 50 hours per week workin and in 1940 maximum 35 hou
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to complete it. The description of the appliance data is repetitive and lacks analytical comparison, focusing instead on listing figures for each decade. Crucially, the response is incomplete; it cuts off abruptly while discussing the housework data, meaning the second half of the prompt is not addressed. The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail to provide a clear summary of the trends. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt and focus on identifying key trends and significant changes rather than listing every individual data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is hindered by the repetitive listing of data. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the awkward transitions between decades (e.g., 'starting with the in 1920', 'Futher the in 1980'). The lack of a concluding sentence or a completed analysis of the second chart makes the overall organisation feel disjointed and unfinished. Using a wider range of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly improve the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic structures like 'use' and 'maximum', which are often used incorrectly (e.g., 'washing machine use by maximum 75%'). There are frequent spelling errors such as 'chenge', 'vacuun', 'refrigetor', and 'washin machi8ne'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using a variety of verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'increased', 'fluctuated', 'proportion', and 'figures', while ensuring accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with article usage ('the line bar'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, making the text difficult to follow. For example, 'in 1920 50 hours per week workin' is not a complete or grammatically correct sentence. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Focusing on basic sentence structure, correct verb tenses, and proofreading for small errors would be a good starting point for improvement.
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