Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph depicted that the changes of electronic equipment and spend of time doing homework in household in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of household in 1920 to 2019 were maximum than number of hours per
week.
Commencing, with the years 1920 the percentage of
washing machine were 40%, refrigerater were 0% and the vaccume cleaner were 30%.In 1940 were almost same and increased than last years.Suddenly this value was increased in 1960 to 2019 the percentage were 100% of vaccume cleaner. Years 1980 and 2000 the refrigerater data were almost same and still it. Washing machine was increased but lowest speed. 2019 years
the minimum percentage than other electric apliancies.
On the other hand the number of hourse per week in 1920 were maximum than next years was 50. Suddenly the counting were decreased in 1940 to 2019. The hourse number in 1940 were 30,in 1960 were 20. while
the number of hourse in 1980 to 2019 were almost same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is often inaccurate or poorly expressed. For example, stating that the percentage of households in 1920 was 'maximum' compared to the number of hours is a confusing comparison. The description of the trends is also imprecise; describing the increase in vacuum cleaner ownership as 'suddenly' is not appropriate for a formal report. While you have identified the key trends, the lack of clarity and the failure to accurately interpret the data points (e.g., the 1940 data) prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two different datasets and use precise language to describe trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Commencing, with the years 1920' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'increased than last years,' which makes it difficult to follow the progression of the data. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear transitions between the description of appliances and the housework hours. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will significantly enhance the readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'increased' and 'were' to describe all data points, which lacks the precision required for a Task 1 report. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'refrigerater', 'vaccume', and 'apliancies', and word choice errors like 'hourse' instead of 'hours'. The phrase 'lowest speed' is an inappropriate collocation for describing a percentage trend. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'declined', and ensure you check your spelling of common terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the percentage of washing machine were'), incorrect preposition use ('in 1920 to 2019'), and awkward phrasing ('the changes of electronic equipment and spend of time'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex sentences to describe trends over time.
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