Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph represents the changes in holding of electrical materials and how much time spended doing domestic work in households in a nation between 1920 and 2019 .
Overall, In the year 1920 refrigerator lagged behind from other appliances with percentage of zero ,but in 2019 it showed dominance on others appliances by 100 percent
By analyzing the line graph in early time of 1920 washing machine was most used appliance with 40 percent then, in year 1940 all appliances were competing each other . At last year 2019 there was no difference of ratio between refrigerator and vacuum cleaner it was same as in previous year while , washing machine slightly increased with 75 percent
Furthermore , In previous time of 1920 it was highest that people do the work with ratio of 50 percent . It was decreasing day by day it decreased to 20 percent in year 1960 . Whereas in year 1980 and in 2000 it was at same percentage of 15 . Then in recent most year 2019 the percentage came at 10 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the 1940 period as 'all appliances were competing each other' is vague and lacks statistical support. The report identifies key trends but fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two datasets, such as noting the inverse relationship between the rise in appliance ownership and the decrease in housework time. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and some data points are described inaccurately, such as the claim that the refrigerator was at 'zero' in 1920, which is not clearly supported by the provided visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hampered by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While there are some transition words like 'Furthermore' and 'Overall', they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'it was highest' in the final paragraph, which lacks a clear antecedent. The paragraphing is present but does not fully support a logical development of the information provided in the charts.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'materials', 'ratio', and 'percentage'. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'holding of electrical materials' instead of 'ownership of electrical appliances' and 'recent most year' instead of 'most recent year'. The student struggles with collocations, such as 'showed dominance on others appliances'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. More precise terminology related to trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', 'surpassed') is missing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with verb tense consistency, such as 'time spended' (should be 'time spent') and 'refrigerator lagged behind'. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing before commas and periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. For example, 'there was no difference of ratio between refrigerator and vacuum cleaner it was same as in previous year' is a run-on sentence that lacks proper coordination or subordination. These errors are frequent and detract from the overall quality of the writing.
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