Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph chart illustrates the change in the ownership of washing machine , refrigerator and vacuum cleaner from the year of 1920 to 2019 and also depict the figure of time spend by individual doing housework.

Overall, the percentage of using refrigerator and vacuum cleaner increase dramatically over the period of time , while number of hours person spend in house to do work decline dramatically .

In 1920, ownership of electrical appliances was low but after 20 years it raise up ( for washing machine raise 40 to 60, refrigerator jump up to 55 from 0 and proportion of vacuum cleaner increase from 30 to 50 percent).Despite this number of hours people work in house remain unchanged in 1980 and 2000 but after 19 years it show a slight decline (from 15 to 10)

Moving further, figure of vacuum cleaner and refrigerator remain same in 2000 and 2019 . But, proportion of washing machine show a slight increase in 2019 (70 percent in 2000 to 75 percent in 2019).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task, including both the appliance ownership trends and the housework time trends. You have identified the main features and made relevant comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat limited by inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, stating that housework time remained 'unchanged in 1980 and 2000' is a vague interpretation of the trend, and the specific data points provided (e.g., 'raise 40 to 60') lack clarity regarding the units or the specific years being referenced. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that the overview clearly synthesizes the relationship between the two sets of data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in 2000 and 2019'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the phrase 'Moving further' is a bit informal for an academic report. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance the overall flow and coherence of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'dramatically', 'proportion', and 'ownership'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'graph chart' (redundant), 'time spend' (should be 'time spent'), and 'raise up' (should be 'rose'). Additionally, the phrasing 'figure of time spend by individual' is unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('refrigerator and vacuum cleaner increase' should be 'increased'), tense inconsistencies (mixing present and past tense when describing historical data), and missing articles ('the' before 'refrigerator'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent verb tense usage and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy will significantly improve your score.

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