Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The 1st line graph illustrate how the ownership of electrical applianes changes between 1920 and 2019 while another line graph shows how much time spent for houshold work per week over the same period of time.
Overall it is clear that, refrigerator 1st used in 1920 and suddenly become more popular among the people by the year , in contrast people were spending more time for housework in 1920 and the number dropped sharply by the year 2019.
Looking at the figure that , washing machine stood 40% in 1920 before rose up gradually to 70% in 1960 then experienced moderate flactuation till 2019 and reached 73%,meanwhile, vacuum cleaner followed the same pattern increasing to 100% by the year 2000 and maintian position to 2019
In comparision, refrigerator recorded nearly 0% in 1920 and suddenly peaked up to 100% in 1980 after that remained stable to 2019.
Turning to the remained figures, amount of time spent on household work began at 50 hours per week in 1920 and dropped sharply to 20 hours in 1960 and then gradually dipped to 10 in 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework time. The overview is present and highlights the main trends effectively. However, the analysis is slightly mechanical, and some data points are described with minor inaccuracies (e.g., stating the washing machine reached 73% in 2019 when the chart shows a different trend). While the main features are selected, the comparison between the two graphs could be more explicitly linked to show the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and time spent on housework. Overall, it addresses the requirements of the task well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data sets. Cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', and 'in comparison' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the missing conjunctions or incorrect comma placement in 'Looking at the figure that , washing machine'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the use of cohesive devices could be more sophisticated to improve the overall readability and logical flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts to use descriptive verbs like 'peaked', 'dipped', and 'fluctuation'. However, there are several spelling errors ('applianes', 'flactuation', 'maintian') and some awkward word choices, such as 'suddenly become more popular' and 'peaked up'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, the frequent spelling mistakes and lack of precision in word choice prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations for describing data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the' refrigerator), subject-verb agreement issues ('The 1st line graph illustrate'), and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences and misplaced commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. Increasing the number of error-free sentences and improving control over complex structures will be essential for reaching a higher band.
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