Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line chart illustrates the proportion of households wiith electrical appliances washing machine,refrigirater and vacuum cleaner in a country between 1920 and 2019. While the second chart compars the number of hours spent per week in the same duration,
Overall, the share of all three household was trend up in all over the duraton, the most dramitically rose was refrigerater. Wherease number of hours of housework
was declined and stood in last year in only 10 hours per wek in 2019.
Looking at the details, washing machine was started in 1920 at 30%. and sharply increased at 60% in 1940. after that only 10% more upward at 70% in 1960. which steadily falled in 1980 at 63%. and again climbed at 75% in 2019. In contrast, in 1920 the refrigirater starts from 0% and upward trajectory in 1960 at 90%. and the final year crossed to 100% in 2019. and vacum cleaner sttart from 30% in 1920 and reached final year to similar refrigirater at 100%
in the other hands, number of housework per week start from 50 hours. and they contiinued in downward in 1960 at only 2oo hours and the final year they are reached tto lowest point at 10% in 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons between the appliances and the housework hours. However, the report suffers from significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state that housework hours reached '2oo hours' in 1960, which is a misreading of the chart, and you incorrectly claim housework reached '10%' in 2019, whereas the chart shows 10 hours. Furthermore, the description of the washing machine trend is slightly disjointed. To improve, ensure you carefully verify the data points against the visual information provided and focus on grouping the information more logically to highlight the key features rather than listing every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow of ideas is often hindered by mechanical and repetitive cohesive devices. Phrases like 'in the other hands' are used incorrectly, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. The use of punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences ending prematurely or being fragmented (e.g., '...in 1940. after that only 10% more...'). To reach a higher band, you should work on using a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that your sentences are complete and logically connected to one another.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors such as 'wiith', 'refrigirater', 'vacum', and 'sttart'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. While you attempt to use descriptive verbs like 'climbed' and 'declined', the range is somewhat limited. To improve, focus on accuracy in spelling and try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a significant surge', to demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the share... was trend up'), incorrect verb tenses, and improper sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb. Reviewing the use of prepositions and articles will also significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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