Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts indicates the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in a country from year 1920 to 2019.

Overall,the early years uses of refrigerator was absolutely nothing but at the end it had reached in the peak with a 100% uses. in graph 2 the number of hours per week was high in the early years but at the end it had came to low numbers.

At a fleeting glance, in 1920 the percentage of refrigerator in percentage of households was nothing, after the 4 decades it had a reached to extreme good level at 90. It had reached peak in the year 1980 and hold peak in the upcoming years. In 1920 washing machine was not at a great percentage but in the upcoming years it had a good growth rate and in the last it had a percentage of 75. Vacuum cleaner had a 30 percentage of households but in the end it had reached it peak growth rate .

At a fleeting glance, in 1920 the hours per week was on a high number but after the 2 decades it had a came to low at 35 hours per week . again it has similar down growth rate as 1920 in 1960. after 2 decades it had 15 numbers hours per week . But in the year 2000 it had no change in it . In the 2019 it had came to little bit down in hours of housework per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the reporting is inconsistent. For instance, the description of the vacuum cleaner is vague ('reached it peak growth rate') without providing the specific data point. The overview is also somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear synthesis of the relationship between the two charts. While the key trends are identified, the lack of precision in data reporting and the somewhat disjointed presentation of information limit the score. To improve, ensure all key data points are clearly stated and the overview provides a more cohesive summary of the overall trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as the repeated use of 'At a fleeting glance' to start paragraphs, which is not an appropriate academic transition. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors. While there is an attempt at logical sequencing, the lack of variety in linking words and the repetitive structure of the paragraphs hinder the overall coherence. Improving the range of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would significantly enhance the readability of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. Phrases like 'extreme good level', 'down growth rate', and 'little bit down' are informal and lack the academic tone required for Task 1. There is also evidence of word-choice errors, such as using 'uses' as a noun instead of 'usage' or 'ownership'. While the meaning is generally clear, the vocabulary lacks the flexibility and precision needed for a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoiding informal or repetitive phrasing. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and trend-related vocabulary will help you convey information more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('The charts indicates'), article usage, and tense consistency ('it had came to low'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas. While the meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors across basic and complex structures prevents a higher score. Focusing on fundamental grammar rules, such as verb tenses and pluralisation, will help improve the accuracy and professional quality of your writing.

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