Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The usage of different electrical appliances like refrigerator, washing machine and vacuum cleaner have been illustrated in the graph below alongwith the time duration of the usage from the years 1920 to 2019. It shows the comparison between different appliances.
Initially starting from the first graph , the percentage of washing machine use has been increased from fron 40% to around 70 % during the span of time with a fall in years 1960 to 1980. inthe year 1920, there is no use of refrigerator but it shows a subsequent rise till 1980s and then it maintained at 100%. lastly discussing the vacuum cleaner , which shows a linear rise in its usage till the years 2000 from 40 to 100% and ten maintained its percentage. this chart depicts that the use of electrical appliances have been increased from the tenure of 1980 to 2019.
the 2nd chart here illustrates the time which has been utillized doing the house chores from the years 1920 to 2019 showing the line drop over the years. contrasting both the graphs it is clear that with the increasing use of electrical appliances, the time consumed during the house work has been reduced.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends for appliance ownership and the inverse relationship with housework time. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, the description of the washing machine trend is inaccurate, as the data shows a steady increase rather than a 'fall in years 1960 to 1980'. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear overview paragraph; the summary is embedded within the body, which is a structural weakness. To reach a higher band, you must ensure data accuracy and provide a distinct, concise overview of the most significant trends at the beginning or end of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by mechanical transitions and repetitive phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'initially' and 'contrasting', the connection between sentences is often abrupt. The paragraphing is also insufficient; the second chart is introduced in a very short paragraph, and the overall structure lacks a clear introduction and a distinct overview. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'the usage of different electrical appliances... have been illustrated', where the subject-verb agreement is faulty, affecting the clarity of the progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic verbs like 'shows', 'increased', and 'maintained'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'time duration of the usage' and 'tenure of 1980 to 2019', which sound unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a downward trend', and ensure that your terminology is used accurately to describe statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'usage... have been illustrated'), incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'from fron 40%'), and punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters at the start of sentences and inconsistent spacing. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and sentence structure will significantly improve your performance.
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