Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrates thousands of first time visitors and returning visitors from Caryl Island in between 2000 and 2008. Overall, it is evident that returning visitors from Caryl Island increased dramatically throughout the period with highest number, whereas first time visitor figure fell initially and steadily increased afterwards.
Turning to the details of line chart, The cardyl island had 8000 of first time visitors in 2000, returning visitors accounted for nearly 3000. Further both figures of visitors number intersected in 2001, Afterwards the number of first time visitor sharply dropped to 4000 and had rose to 6000 again in 2004. Eventually, number of first time visitor consistently increased untill 2008 and visitors were counted nearly 12000
Moving to the rest of the details, after 2000 returning visitors constantly increard from 3000 to 10000 Then, growth of returning visitors followed slow pace and only grew by 2000. After that for next two years returning
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a summary of charts regarding electrical appliance ownership and housework time between 1920 and 2019. However, the student has written about visitor numbers to 'Caryl Island' between 2000 and 2008. Because the response fails to address the task requirements entirely, it cannot be assessed on the accuracy of data reporting for the intended prompt. While the student attempts to describe trends, the content is irrelevant to the provided visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs with some attempt at logical progression, using transition signals like 'Turning to the details' and 'Moving to the rest of the details'. However, the referencing is problematic because the content does not match the prompt. The cohesion is mechanical, and the abrupt ending of the final sentence ('returning') indicates an incomplete thought, which disrupts the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for describing trends in a graph, using terms such as 'increased dramatically', 'fell initially', 'sharply dropped', and 'consistently increased'. However, there are spelling errors such as 'untill' and 'increard'. The range is limited and repetitive, and the misuse of terminology regarding the subject matter (writing about visitors instead of appliances) limits the ability to demonstrate a sophisticated range of vocabulary relevant to the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'in between 2000 and 2008' (incorrect preposition), 'had rose' (incorrect tense), and 'visitors were counted nearly 12000' (missing preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalisation, such as 'The cardyl island'. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors is noticeable and occasionally impedes the reader's understanding.
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