Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in a specific country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, percentage of refrigerator surged dramatically from 1920 to 1980 and after that period it remained unchanged. Additionally, the percentage of washing machine climbed gradually whereas the vacuum cleaner increased steadily during the given period. Furthermore, the number of hours per week fell gradually from 1920 to 2019.

Refrigerator ownership jumped dramatically and reached 90 percent in 1960 whereas the others climbed to 70 percent in the same year. Refrigerator climbed gradually after 1960, reached to 100 percent in 1980 and remained constant ever since as compare to washing machines which fell gradually from 1960 to 1980 and then increased steadily. The percentage of vacuum cleaner grew constantly from 1920 to 2000 where it reached to 100 percent along with refrigerator and is still unchanged in 2019. The percentage of washing machines is far less than the others that is around 75 percent.

The percentage of households owning electrical appliances increased from 1920 to 2019 while the number of hours per week fell gradually. It was around 50 in 1920 which decreased to approximately 20 in 1960. After another 20 years it fell a little more and recorded around 15 in the year 1980. It remained unchanged until 2000 where as it is recorded as lowest in 2019 which is 10 hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. You successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons. However, the report contains some inaccuracies in data interpretation. For example, you state that the refrigerator reached 100% in 1980, but the chart shows it reaching this level earlier, and you mention the vacuum cleaner reached 100% in 2000, which is not clearly supported by the provided visual data. To improve, ensure that data points are read with greater precision and that comparisons between the two charts are more explicitly linked to the overall trend of time-saving.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally clear, and you use cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'whereas' to link information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the third paragraph where the comparison between the refrigerator and washing machines is somewhat disjointed. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'surged', 'climbed', 'remained constant', and 'steadily'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For instance, 'percentage of refrigerator' is imprecise; it should be 'percentage of households owning a refrigerator'. Additionally, phrases like 'reached to 100 percent' are grammatically incorrect, as 'reach' does not take a preposition. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology and ensuring that collocations are natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the percentage of refrigerator'), incorrect preposition usage ('reached to'), and awkward phrasing ('as compare to'). There are also minor punctuation issues. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions when describing statistical data.

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