Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the given charts, comparisons of households relations with the electrical appliance by the passage of time which showing the increase in usage dependence over decrease in the per hours spent on the house.
In the first chart, there are three electrical driven appliances are mentioned which are washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner which is are demonstrating the trends among the percentage of households on vertical and time in years on horizontal axis of graph. That show the usage of washing machine was around 40% at the beginning which increased over time to more than 70%, at the other hand, refrigerator usage surged to almost 100% during that time frame. However the vacuum showed the steeper and slight increasing trend in the end of 2019 it became almost equal to refrigerator.
secondly the graph of number per hours and years as a time describing the decline trend because the advancement in electrical appliances technology over time decrease the time requirement in per house.
Overall the conclusion of the charts are that the increase in technology with respect to time showing the incline in electronic appliances usage, hence the per hours are reduced.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the trends for the appliances and the decline in housework hours, the comparison between the two sets of data is underdeveloped. You mention that technology leads to a reduction in housework, but you do not explicitly link specific data points or time periods to support this correlation effectively. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed overview of the data, including specific percentages or years, and clearly highlight the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and time spent on housework.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'In the first chart' and 'secondly' are used, but the transitions between sentences and ideas are often abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the charts could be more smoothly integrated. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'increase in usage' and 'decline trend'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'households relations with the electrical appliance' and 'number per hours'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little evidence of less common or more sophisticated lexical items. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and data would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'which showing the increase', 'three electrical driven appliances are mentioned which are... which is are demonstrating', and 'the graph of number per hours'. These errors involve subject-verb agreement, relative clauses, and word order. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms before attempting more complex structures.
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