Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This chart shows the ownership of electrical appliances and their fluctuated ratios, additionally depicts the amount of time required to do household chores in one country over the period between 1920 and 2019.
To begin with, refrigerators ownership was only 0 percent in 1920 but it showed some inclines later from 1920 to 2019. Furthermore, it remained stable from 1960 to 2019 accounted for 90 percent to 100 percent.
Secondly, percentage of washing machines were 40 percent in 1920 but it increased significantly and reached 70 percent by 1960. Additionally, at that time, it showed some declines and again trend go upward up to 72 percent.
Thirdly, ownership of the Vacuum cleaners started from the 30 percent in 1920 and increased dramatically until it reached 90 million in 2019.
Second graph depicts the number of hours consumed by these appliances per week. It illustrated the declines started from the 50 million in 1950 and ended up to the merely 10 percent in 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention '90 million' for vacuum cleaners and '50 million' for hours, which are not supported by the provided data. Additionally, the description of the trends is sometimes confusing, such as stating refrigerator ownership was 0 percent in 1920 when the chart indicates a starting point above 0. While you attempt to summarize the information, the misinterpretation of the data units and values prevents a clear overview. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axes and labels of the charts before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Secondly' to transition between points. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the transition between the first graph (appliances) and the second graph (hours) is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words to show relationships between the data points rather than just listing them would enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic terms like 'increased', 'showed', and 'declines'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'fluctuated ratios' and 'trend go upward'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to describing trends, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', 'gradual increase', or 'remained constant'. Additionally, ensure you use the correct terminology for the data presented (e.g., percentages vs. absolute numbers).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'refrigerators ownership was' (should be 'refrigerator ownership'), 'percentage of washing machines were' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'trend go upward' (tense error). Punctuation and article usage also need attention. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your report. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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