Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line charts compare the ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall it can be seen that, the Refrigerator the most popular activity throughout the period. Washing machine experienced the most dramatic growth and finished second by 2019. Whereas Vacuum cleaner saw a rose sharply to become big popular.
To begin with, in 1920, about between 0 to 100 people attending percentage of household with electrical appliances had raising. in addition, washing machine 40% ratio of the individuals was been taking and it was sell upto 68% of the citizens. Finally, the Vacuum cleaner was initiate in 1920 and after it was hiking to end of 2019.
on the other hand, nevertheless, the phenomena of the number of hours of housework per week between 1920 and 2019. Therefore, the number of humans was taking housework per week beginning with 50 members and it was diminished to until the end of the year 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the trends is confusing and often factually incorrect based on the provided charts. For example, the statement that the refrigerator was the 'most popular activity' is nonsensical in this context. The data points mentioned, such as '0 to 100 people attending', are irrelevant and do not reflect the percentage of households. The overview is weak and lacks a clear comparison between the two charts. To improve, you must focus on accurately reporting the specific percentages and time values shown in the graphs rather than using vague or incorrect terminology.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and confusing transitions. While some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'on the other hand' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the appliances and the housework hours. The overall arrangement lacks a coherent flow, and the relationship between the two charts is not effectively established.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'activity' instead of 'appliance', and 'citizens' or 'members' instead of 'households'. Phrases like 'was been taking' and 'was initiate' demonstrate a lack of control over basic collocations and word forms. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately, relying on repetitive and imprecise language. To reach a higher band, you need to learn specific vocabulary for describing data trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', and 'gradual increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragmented or nonsensical, such as 'the phenomena of the number of hours of housework per week between 1920 and 2019.' Subject-verb agreement is consistently problematic, and there is an absence of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The errors are pervasive and make the text difficult to understand. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement is essential for improvement.
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