Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line diagram illustrate changes in ownership of electronic home gadgets and total time spent doing housework in different houses in a country in between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, first line graph presents the proportion of households with electrical appliances. We can see clear fluctuation in ownership of washing machine. While, ownership of refrigerator was dramatically increased. Similarly, we can witness the same trend in vacuum tube.
In contrast, no. of working hours dramatically fell during the years.
The ownership of washing machine was recorded least in 1920 with 40% households. Then, it rose gradually till 1960 and started to increase and peak in 2019 with 73%. Then, use of refrigerator recorded 0%. Then, it was abnormally rose and now in 2019, almost 100% household uses refrigerator. After vacuum tube became popular during the years and now it is use by 75% households.
In contrast, number of hours of housework per week was 50 hours in 1920 but it was fall dramatically. Now in 2019, only 10 hours per week
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For example, the description of the refrigerator trend as 'abnormally rose' is imprecise, and the data points are occasionally vague or missing. While the overview identifies the main trends, the report would benefit from more careful selection of data to support the comparisons, particularly regarding the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time. The conclusion is incomplete, as the final sentence is a fragment.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Then' to start sentences. Some transitions are awkward, such as 'After vacuum tube became popular', which lacks clarity. The logical progression is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors and fragmented sentences, particularly in the final paragraph. While there is an overall attempt at a logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the presence of disjointed sentences limit the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'electronic home gadgets' instead of 'electrical appliances' and 'vacuum tube' instead of 'vacuum cleaner'. The phrasing 'abnormally rose' is not a standard collocation for describing data trends. While the student attempts to use descriptive language, the range is limited, and there are noticeable errors in word choice that occasionally make the writing sound unnatural. More precise terminology related to data reporting would improve the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The given line diagram illustrate'), missing articles ('use of refrigerator'), and tense inconsistencies. The final sentence is an incomplete fragment ('only 10 hours per week'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading for basic sentence completion and verb forms is required.
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