Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts present the modifications in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in an nation between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, the most noticeable feature is that refrigerator and vacuum cleaner were the maximum number of electrical appliances utilized. Therefore washing machine was access remained stable from the entire given period. In addition amount of time spend in housework per week earlier was the highest amount of time spent and the end of the year was the least amount of time spent per week.
In 1920 from none of people utilized except washing machine and vacuum cleaner but refrigerator was the began from scratch 0 percent and peak at 50 % usage by the refrigerator in 1940. Morever all the three electrical appliances were reach 100 percentage used at 1980,2000 and 2019 respectively. However washing machine was the remained stable from 1920 at 40 % accessed then slighted rise in 1049 and 1960 at 60 percentage.
On the other hand in 1920 the highest number of time spent in 50 hours. Subsequently the least amount of time spent in 2019 it was significantly low at 10 percentage.
After 1940 slighted delined beg
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The overview is confusing, and the description of trends is often factually incorrect based on the provided charts (e.g., claiming all appliances reached 100% in 1980, 2000, and 2019). The data selection is inconsistent, and the report ends abruptly with an incomplete sentence, leaving the task unfinished. Key features are not highlighted effectively, and the comparison between the two charts is weak. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant trends—such as the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time—and ensure all data points are accurately transcribed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition' and 'On the other hand,' but they are often applied incorrectly or do not link ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. The abrupt ending of the text significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would help the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the refrigerator was the began from scratch' and 'washing machine was access remained stable.' These errors occasionally impede communication, as the reader must guess the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should practice using more precise verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained constant,' or 'a significant decline,' and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'refrigerator and vacuum cleaner were the maximum number' and 'all the three electrical appliances were reach 100 percentage.' Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, which makes the text difficult to read. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors are pervasive enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like article usage and verb forms will be essential for improvement.
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