Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph demonstrate information about selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
By having a cursory glance it is lucid that, number of hours per week is about 50 percent in 1920. However, significantly it decreased around 35 percent in 1940. After that, it plunged down 20 percent in 1960 and 15 percent in 1980. Moreover, it is approximately 15 and 10 percent in 2000 and 2019.Further more, percentages of households in washing machine is about 40 percent in 1920, it grow up to 60 percent in 1940. However, it reach 70 percent in 1960 and slightly go down 62 percent in 1980. After that, it is around 70 -72 percent in 2000 and 2019.
Moving further ahead, it is vivid that, refrigerator starts form 0 percent in 1920 . However, it rapidly rise up to around 55 percent in 1940 and 90 percent in 1960.Moreover, it reach 100 percent in 1980 and stay same in 2000 and 2019.Further more, in vacuum cleaner sector it starts form 30 percent in 1920 and end up on 100 percent in 2019.
overall, refrigerator starts form 0 but end on 100 where as, vacuum cleaner also reach at its highest on 100 . number of hours per year starts from 50 but it decreased throughout the years and end up on 10 in 2019
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for appliances and housework hours. However, the introduction is problematic; it copies the prompt's instructions rather than paraphrasing the graph's content. While the main features are identified, the reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising the information into a clear, analytical overview. The overview provided at the end is functional but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and providing a more integrated summary of the overall trends rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or slightly unnatural, such as the frequent use of 'Moreover' and 'Further more'. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by the way data is presented; the transition between the different appliances could be smoother. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the mechanical nature of the linking words and the lack of varied referencing mean that the flow is not always fluid.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'calibrated in percentage' (should be 'measured in percentages') and 'vacuum cleaner sector' (which is unnecessary). The student relies on basic verbs like 'grow', 'reach', and 'rise' repeatedly. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'a significant decline', or 'a steady upward trend', to demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph demonstrate', 'refrigerator starts form'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'it grow up', 'it reach'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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