Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Two charts are shown , first graph illustrates the percentage of house holds including washing machine , Refrigerator and vacum cleaner from 1920 to 2019 Secondly another graph shows number of hours of house work per week from [redacted phone]
If we look at first graph Percentage of refrigerator is continously increasing and after 1980 the curve become straight means not increased nor decreased between 1980 to 2019 , secondly washing machine percentage in house hold was 40% in 1920 increased to 70% till 1960 More over declining of curve from 70% to 60% in between 1960 to 1980 Afterwards percentage increased to 75% in 2019 , However vacum cleaner percentage in house hold increased from 30% to 100% from 1920 to 2000 afterwards curve shows straight line means not increased not decreased.
Second graph shows number of hours spent on households including washing clothes , preparing meals , cleaning per week , Curve shows continous decline in number of hours spend on household works from 1920 to
2019, however from 1920 to 1960 number of hours declined at higher rate from 50 hrs to 20 hours furthermore from 1960 to 2019 declining in hours goes gradually slow from 20hours to 10 hours.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the overview is missing; a summary of the most significant trends is essential for a higher band. While the data is generally accurate, the description of the refrigerator trend is slightly imprecise, as it does not reach 100% in the provided data. The report would benefit from a more analytical approach that synthesizes the relationship between the two charts, rather than simply listing the data points for each appliance and activity separately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. Phrases like 'If we look at first graph' and 'Second graph shows' are somewhat mechanical. While the progression of ideas is clear, the use of linking words is limited, and some transitions between sentences feel abrupt. To improve, you should use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall readability of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'increased', 'declined', and 'shows'. There are also some spelling errors, such as 'vacum' instead of 'vacuum' and 'house holds' instead of 'households'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a significant drop'. Using a more varied range of vocabulary will help you demonstrate a better command of the language and make your writing more engaging.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles (e.g., 'first graph', 'percentage of refrigerator') and punctuation. Some sentences are run-on or lack proper conjunctions, such as 'means not increased nor decreased'. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid fragments or run-on structures.
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