Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the linear representations demonstrate the data related to changes in ownership of electrical appliances and number of hours spent doing household work in one nation from 1920 to 2019. moreover, data is given in the form of percentage.

Overall, every house was equipped with refrigerator and vacuum cleaner till 2019. however, during 1920 few percentage of houses had them. number of washing machines kept on fluctuate. moreover, working hours for household work kept on decreasing between 1920 and 2019.

in 1920,not even a single house had refrigerator. however, till 1940 number increased and 50% of houses had a refrigerator. moreover , number kept on increasing with sharp pace and reached 100% till 1980 and remained same till 2019. 29% of houses had a vacuum cleaner and it had a sharp rise of 40% till 1960 number reached 70%.furthermore, number kept on increasing and climbed till 100 % in 2000 and remain same till 2019. 40% of houses were equipped with washing machine in 1920 and it had a steady rise of 29% till 1960.however number dropped in 1980 by 7% but increased again with steady pace and reached 75% till 2019.

in 1920, people usually spend 50 hours for household work and it had a sharp drop of 29.9% till 1950. however, it remained same till 2000. in 2019,numbe dropped by 5%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trends for appliances and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While you have identified key data points, the reporting is occasionally inaccurate (e.g., stating 'not even a single house had refrigerator' in 1920, whereas the chart shows a small percentage). The description of the washing machine trend is also slightly confusing. To improve, ensure you provide a more accurate summary of the data and focus on making meaningful comparisons between the different appliances rather than just listing statistics for each one individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite repetitive and mechanical, with frequent use of 'moreover' and 'however' to start sentences. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and some transitions feel forced. The logical progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by the way data is presented, making it feel like a list of numbers rather than a cohesive report. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider range of cohesive devices would significantly enhance the readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple verbs like 'had', 'increased', and 'dropped'. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary or precise collocations related to data description (e.g., 'a sharp rise', 'a steady decline'). Additionally, there are minor errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'number kept on fluctuate' (should be 'fluctuated') and 'with sharp pace'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends and changes in data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in 1920, not even a single house had refrigerator'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'number kept on fluctuate'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. You should focus on improving your control over basic grammar, particularly article usage and subject-verb agreement, and try to incorporate more varied sentence structures to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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