Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The number of bargraphs showcase the hours per week spent on household work in year 1920 to 2019.
In early years people were less likely to operate electirc gadgets because in year 1920, ownership of refrigerator were almost zero but washing machine and vaccum cleaner were high in demand with require minimum 50 hours a week. Furthermore, after two decades growing demands of fridge has been touched the chart upto 55 percent same as other two appliances. Working hours were reduced upto 20 hrs in 1940. Moreover, rapid shifting growing of refrigerated showing its vital role with upto 90 percent houses have the ownerships of it in 1960, while holding 70 percent rest of two with targeting only 20hrs a weekly time consumption. Despite this, demand of washing machine remain the same in upcoming 60 years, while reaching the higher percentage of refrigerato, vaccum cleaner 100 percent. Nevertheless, working hours keep decreasing with increasing demand of electric equipment with only maximum 10 hrs per week for rest of 60 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main trends and makes some comparisons, but the accuracy of the data reporting is inconsistent. For instance, the claim that washing machine ownership was 'high in demand' in 1920 contradicts the visual data, which shows it at zero. Additionally, the description of the trends is often confusing, such as the statement that 'washing machine remain the same in upcoming 60 years' while the chart shows a clear upward trajectory. While the key features are addressed, the lack of precision in interpreting the data and the failure to clearly distinguish between the three appliances throughout the period limit the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Nevertheless', they are often applied in ways that do not accurately reflect the relationship between the ideas. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the timeline of changes. The use of referencing is also problematic, as it is often unclear which appliance is being referred to in specific sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'bargraphs', 'electirc', 'vaccum', and 'refrigerato'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. Phrases like 'rapid shifting growing of refrigerated' are non-standard and impede clarity. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', or 'significant increase', and ensure that the names of the appliances are spelled correctly and used consistently throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'ownership of refrigerator were'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'demand of washing machine remain the same'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are several instances of missing articles or incorrect word forms. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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