Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrates the electrical appliances possession changes and spending time doing housework in households in one country from 1920 till 2019.
Overall, the vaccum cleaner demands increased and saved time in households. Refrigerator demands also rose and remained stable and Washine machine graph has fluctuations.
In 1920, people took 50 hours per week in cleaning as there were lowest usage of vaccum. It rose gradually and reached at peak point in 20
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the score. Because the essay is incomplete and stops abruptly mid-sentence, it fails to report on the main features or make necessary comparisons between the two charts. The overview is too brief and lacks the necessary detail to cover the trends across the century. To improve, you must complete the task by describing all data points and ensuring the response meets the length requirement to allow for a full development of the information provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or the use of cohesive devices. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of development means there is no logical progression of ideas. The transition between the overview and the body paragraph is abrupt, and the text ends prematurely, preventing any meaningful structure. To improve, ensure you have a clear introduction, a well-developed overview, and separate body paragraphs that logically group the data trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and contains several errors, such as 'vaccum' (spelling) and 'Washine machine' (spelling). The phrasing is repetitive, and the range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data accurately. There is no attempt to use less common lexical items or precise terminology related to data analysis. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing trends, such as 'a significant increase' or 'a steady decline', and ensure you proofread for basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is basic and contains several errors that hinder clarity, such as 'people took 50 hours per week in cleaning' and 'there were lowest usage'. The sentence structures are simple and lack the variety required for higher bands. The incomplete sentence at the end further demonstrates a lack of control. To improve, focus on using accurate prepositions and articles, and practice constructing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions to link your ideas more effectively.
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