Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph depicts the information about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
To begin with, the pecentage of refrigerator used by individuals in year 1920 was 0% but, it was rapidly rose from year 1940 to 2000 and came at 100%. Furthermore, the percent of washing machine used by household in one country in 1920 were at 40% and it was slightly increased in year 1940 to 1960.
Furthermore, the number of hours spent by individuals in housework such as, washing clothes and preparing meals, cleaning was 50 hours per week in year 1920 but, it was decreased in year 1940 at 33 hours. Moreover, 20 hours spent by people in housework in year 1960 and number of hours slightly fall in year 1980 to 2019.
Overall, the most of household prefer to use refrigrator.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends for appliance ownership and housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the 0% to 100% rise for refrigerators, the description of the washing machine and vacuum cleaner trends is incomplete, and the comparison between the two datasets is weak. To reach a higher band, you should synthesize the data more effectively by highlighting the inverse relationship between the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours, rather than simply listing figures chronologically. The overview is also very brief and lacks a clear summary of the overall trend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Overall'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical and repetitive. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between different time periods feels abrupt. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'used', 'rose', and 'spent'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'pecentage of refrigerator used' (should be 'percentage of households with refrigerators') and 'number of hours slightly fall' (should be 'number of hours slightly fell'). To achieve a higher score, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'gradual decline', or 'significant growth', and ensure your nouns and verbs agree in number.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder readability. Examples include 'it was rapidly rose' (incorrect passive/active construction), 'percent of washing machine... were at 40%' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'the most of household' (article error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and avoiding the unnecessary use of the passive voice when the active voice is more natural and accurate.
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