Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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First of all the 1980 is 17% and the 2000 is the dowe of the 16%and 2019 is the down of the 10%

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Percentage of households with electrical appliances ([redacted phone])

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. It does not provide a clear summary of the main features or trends, and the data points provided are often inaccurate or confusingly presented. The response is also under the minimum word count requirement, which significantly impacts the ability to develop ideas. The description of the trends is fragmented and lacks the necessary comparison between the two charts. To improve, you must identify the overall trends (e.g., the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time) and support these with accurate data points rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the sentences within them do not flow logically, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused (e.g., 'First of all', 'Second of all'). The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between the data and the trends described. The structure is disjointed, and the information is presented as a list of disconnected facts rather than a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'the down of the' and 'the up of the', which are not appropriate for describing statistical trends. There is a lack of variety in the language used to describe changes, such as 'increase', 'decrease', 'fluctuate', or 'decline'. Spelling errors are frequent, and the word choice is often inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of the information being presented.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including incorrect preposition usage, missing articles, and faulty sentence structure. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences or missing spaces after commas. These errors are pervasive and frequently impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. A significant improvement in basic sentence construction and grammatical accuracy is required.

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