Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart shows the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Overall, the percentage of households with electrical increases.

For washing machine, the initial percentage in 1920 is 40%, the percentage increase slightly from 1920 to 2019. It increase from 40% in 1920 to 73% in 2019, which increase 33% in 100 years.

For refrigerator, people in 1920 did not own it in 1920. The percentage of households increases rapidly from 1940 to 1960, which has reached 100% in 1980. The percentage remains 100% from 1980 to 2019. It has increased 100% in a century.

For vacuum cleaner, the percentage of households increase from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000. The percentage increase steadily in this period and it remains 100% in the period between 2000 to 2019. It has increased 100% in 100 years.

The overall use of electrical appliances in the household increases from 1920 to 2019 increases, the number of hours of housework per week decreases with it. It decreases from 50 hours per week in 1920 to 11 hours per week in 2019, which decreases significantly. It decreases 39 hours in this 100 years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends in appliance ownership and housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, integrated overview. While the key features are mentioned, the comparison between the rise in appliances and the decline in housework is underdeveloped. The report relies heavily on listing data points rather than synthesizing the information. To reach a higher band, you should group data more effectively and provide a more analytical summary that highlights the relationship between the two charts rather than just describing them sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive. For instance, almost every paragraph begins with 'For [appliance name]' or 'The percentage of...'. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences. While the progression of ideas is clear, the reliance on simple, repetitive sentence structures and basic transitions limits the flow. Improving the use of referencing and a wider range of cohesive devices would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. You frequently repeat the same verbs, such as 'increase' and 'decrease', which makes the writing feel monotonous. There is little attempt to use less common vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'climb', 'surge', 'plummet', 'fluctuate'). While the meaning is always clear and there are no significant spelling errors, the limited lexical variety prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Incorporating more precise terminology for describing data trends would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the percentage increase slightly' instead of 'increased'), tense inconsistencies (e.g., 'the initial percentage in 1920 is 40%'), and awkward phrasing. While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on maintaining consistent verb tenses when describing past data and ensure correct subject-verb agreement. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures would also help demonstrate better control over grammar.

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