Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts show changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework in households in country between 1920 and 2019.
The information by selecting and reporting main features are summarized and make comparison.
In the first diagram the percentage of households with electrical appliances in the year of 1920 to 2019 are explained.The percentage of year 1920 in the households are high. On the otherhand the percentage of other year are low compare to the year of 1920.
In the second diagram the number of hours of house work per week per house hold are explained.In the diagram the numbers of hours are explained .The numbers of hours for house work are per hold 1920 to 2019.The year 1920 of work is high then other.On the other hand the number of hours for the other years are less then 1920. At the end i say the numbers of hours for house work is good in 1920.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the charts. You have misinterpreted the trends, stating that appliance ownership and housework hours were higher in 1920 than in later years, which contradicts the typical progression of such data. Furthermore, you have not selected the main features or made relevant comparisons between the two charts. The response is largely descriptive in a vague, repetitive manner rather than analytical. To improve, you must carefully observe the specific data points (e.g., the rise in appliance ownership over time) and describe the relationship between the two trends, such as how increased appliance ownership correlates with a decrease in housework hours.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is unclear and repetitive. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'In the diagram' and 'On the other hand'. The introduction is poorly constructed, and the concluding sentence is informal and does not effectively summarise the main trends. The lack of logical flow between sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, distinct focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words like 'high', 'low', 'numbers', and 'explained'. There is no attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to data analysis or the subject matter (e.g., 'fluctuation', 'correlation', 'household appliances', 'drastic decline'). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the year of 1920 to 2019 are explained'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and data, and avoid repeating the same simple adjectives throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the percentage... are explained'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Practising the formation of complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions will also help improve your grammatical range.
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