Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this chart mention the changes in ownership of electronic appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country during the period of 1920 and 2019.
Overall, these two chart explain the details of percentage of households and years further more number of hours per week also give the usage of equipment's of electronic such as washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner which are use for washing cloths, preparing meals and cleaning.
The first chart explain the percentage of households within years in 1920 refrigerator take a start from 0% and after that it take a significantly rise at 50% to 100% till 2019. However, washing machine and vacuum cleaner starting percentage is 30 and 40 vacuum cleaner show dramatic change and goes on 100% from 1920 to 2019 although, washing machine goes with ups and downs between these ten years around 72%.
Furthermore ,number of hours per week consistently decline from 50 hours to 10 hours in these ten years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the description of the washing machine trend as having 'ups and downs' is vague and does not accurately reflect the provided data points. Furthermore, the reference to 'these ten years' is factually incorrect as the period spans a century (1920–2019). While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the misinterpretation of the time scale prevent a higher score. More careful attention to the specific figures and the overall timeframe is required.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect clauses. The logical progression is interrupted by grammatical errors and unclear referencing, particularly when discussing the time periods. While the overall structure is discernible, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the somewhat disjointed nature of the sentences make the progression feel mechanical rather than fluid. Improving the use of transition signals would significantly enhance the readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'take a start' instead of 'began' and 'equipment's of electronic' instead of 'electrical appliances'. The repetition of basic verbs like 'goes' and 'take' limits the lexical variety. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'cloths' instead of 'clothes'. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that nouns and adjectives are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('refrigerator take a start'), incorrect tense usage, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing historical data will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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