Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph depicts the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and proportion of time spent performing housework in households in specific country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, the line graph shows the most popular households with electrical appliances is refrigerator whereas usage of washing machine remains parallel throughout the following year.
Firstly, the usage of washing machine in 1920 is 40% and gradually increased to 60% in 1940 and 70% in 1960 and slightly decreased in 1980 upto 65% then again shows upward trend and in 2019 ends with 75%. Secondly people start using refrigerator in 1920 and rapidly increased to 55% in 1940 and maintain upward trend till in 1980 and hit the maximum 100% and maintained the highest percentage till 2019. Moreover, the vacuum cleaner was 30% in 1920 slowly rose to 100% in 2000 and ends 100% in 2019.
furthermore, people used to work for 50 hours per a week in 1920. then it started decreasing to 20 hours per week in 1960. and continue downward trend and ends up with just to 10 hours in 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by describing the trends for three appliances and the time spent on housework. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; stating that the usage of the washing machine 'remains parallel' is confusing, and the summary lacks a clear synthesis of the relationship between appliance ownership and housework time. While the main features are identified, the reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than highlighting significant trends or making meaningful comparisons between the categories. To improve, focus on grouping the data more effectively and providing a more analytical overview that captures the inverse relationship between appliance ownership and time spent on chores.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'furthermore'. Some transitions are abrupt, and the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the appliance data and the housework time is quite sudden. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that sentences within paragraphs are more logically connected would enhance the overall flow and coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the reader to understand the trends described. However, the range is limited and there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'specific country' instead of 'a specific country' and 'parallel' to describe a fluctuating trend. The phrasing is often repetitive, with frequent use of 'increased to' and 'maintained'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'witnessed a steady decline', and ensure more precise collocations when discussing data and statistics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in specific country'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'per a week'), and inconsistent verb tense usage when describing historical data. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters after periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage for past data will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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