Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two bar graphs illustrate changes percentage of households owning three electrical appliances, namely washing machine, refrigerators and vacuum cleaner, and the average number of hours spent on housework per week between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, ownerships of all three electrical appliances increased considerably over the period, while the amount of time spent on housework declined dramatically. Refrigerators experienced the most significant growth, reaching almost universal ownership by 1980.
In 2019, and 2019, the percentage of households with different appliances. Washing machine had growing 1920 to 2019. The ratio of using washing machine in 1920 have three tenth (30%) and moving another year the using of washing machine is increases every year. And refrigerator is the most demanded electrical appliance they are universally reached the higher demanded appliance. Vacuum is also vary useful electrical appliance increases the every year between 1920 to 2019.
Meanwhile, weekly housework fell steadily from 50 hours in 1920 to only about 10 hours in 2019, indicating a strong relationship between increased appliance ownership and reduced housework time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the analysis is inconsistent. While the overview is clear, the body paragraph describing the appliances is poorly developed and lacks specific data points. For instance, stating that washing machine usage 'have three tenth' is grammatically unclear and fails to accurately report the figures provided in the chart. The comparison between the two charts is attempted but lacks the precision required for a higher band. To improve, ensure that specific data points are cited to support general trends and avoid vague descriptions like 'moving another year'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas within the third paragraph is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect sentences. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'In 2019, and 2019' is confusing and does not serve as an effective transition. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. Phrases like 'growing 1920 to 2019' and 'the using of washing machine' are awkward and demonstrate a lack of control over collocations. There are also errors in word form, such as 'universally reached the higher demanded appliance', which impedes clarity. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of precision and frequent errors in word choice prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on accurate collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help improve this score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Washing machine had growing') and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction is often fragmented or awkward, which occasionally makes the meaning difficult to follow. To achieve a higher band, the student should aim to incorporate a wider range of complex structures, such as subordinate clauses or passive voice, while ensuring that basic grammatical rules are applied consistently to reduce the frequency of errors.
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