Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph gives information about track changes in the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours of housework per week in one country between 1920 to 2019.

Overall, due to the lack knowledge and technological instruments, In early years there were less households appliances in Comparison between 2019. If there were less appliances it means the number of hours per week is higher.

The household items like washing machine refrigerator and vacuum cleaner gradually increases in numbers after 1940. In year 1980, 2000, 2019 the two households vacuum cleaner, and refrigerator were remained same. And washing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the description of the data is fragmented and stops abruptly mid-sentence. While there is an attempt to identify an overall trend, the analysis of the data is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. The relationship between appliance ownership and housework hours is mentioned but not clearly explained or supported with specific data points from the graph. To improve, you must complete the description, provide a clear overview, and ensure all key features are reported with supporting data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the body paragraphs are not developed, and the text ends prematurely. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is disjointed. The paragraphing is insufficient, and the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the sentences. To improve, ensure you have a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and separate body paragraphs that logically group the data, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'lack knowledge' and 'technological instruments' are used, but the overall range is insufficient to discuss the data with precision. There are errors in word choice, such as 'track changes' (which is unnecessary) and 'less households appliances' (should be 'fewer household appliances'). The vocabulary lacks the sophistication required for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, focus on using precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant increase', and ensure correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'In early years there were less households appliances in Comparison between 2019' and 'the two households vacuum cleaner, and refrigerator were remained same'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the control over basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, is weak. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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