Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line chart illustrate the percentage of home use electrical appliances in the house hold in one state middle of the 1920 to 2019 .
There types of home appliances are most used in 1920 to 2019 . The line chart shows the percentage of electrical appliances .
First the thing is washing machine are used in in before time f 1920 and than the percentage of using in households he was start in 1920 and the percentage is 40% and than he was slow to up and the final percentage is 73% in 2019 . secondly the refrigerator are starting in 1920 and now the percentage of using in 100% and last the vacuum cleaner user are using the vacuum cleaner in below the 1920 and the percentage in 1920 is 30% and he was very using and most selling home appliances and the percentage is 100% at the time of 2019 .
The number of hours of housework i per week per household in 1920 to 2019 people are using in 50 hours per week in 1920 and the time was spending hours are decrease the hours are only 10 at the time of 2019 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the trends in appliance ownership and housework hours. However, the overview is missing, and the reporting of data is inconsistent and lacks precision. For example, stating that the refrigerator usage is '100%' is an overgeneralization, and the description of the vacuum cleaner trend is confusing. The response fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two charts, such as the inverse relationship between the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends and use data points more accurately to support your descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas effectively. Phrases like 'First the thing is' and 'secondly' are used in a mechanical and repetitive way. Referencing is often unclear, particularly with the use of 'he' to refer to inanimate objects like appliances. The lack of logical flow between the appliance data and the housework data makes the overall structure feel fragmented. Using a wider range of linking words and ensuring clear transitions between paragraphs would significantly improve the coherence of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms such as 'percentage', 'using', and 'appliances'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'slow to up' and 'the thing is'. The student struggles with collocations, for example, 'home use electrical appliances' instead of 'household electrical appliances'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', 'decline', or 'significant increase', and avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The line chart illustrate'), article usage, and tense consistency. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the time was spending hours are decrease'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses when describing past data, and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and article placement.
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