Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given charts show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Let illustrate the chart in detail manner.
In 1920 the use of Refrigerator in households was 0% due to new technology. But in the next few decades the number were surprisingly increase by 55% which is quite impressive as compare to 1920, and it keep increasing by 95 % in the year 1960. And then the number reach by 100% from the year 1980 to 2019 respectively.
As per the given chart it is clearly observable that the percentage of washing machine and vacuum cleaner were already been increased by 30% and 40% in 1920. And between the year 1940 to 2019 the number were increasing for vacuum cleaner but at the other side washing machine look like a roller coaster which is going up down between 60 to 80%.
The number of hours of housework in 1920 was around 50% and in the 2 decades the percentage fell around by 15% which is 35%. And it can shown in the year 1960 where the number is 20% which is comparatively less from past decades. But from 1980 to 2019 the number were constant between 15 to 10%.
In conclusion, in this country the most of household owns refrigerator and vacuum cleaner more and as compare to washing machine in the starting of 1920 but the number got increases by time passes. And the other the numbers of housework were at peak in the year 1920 but slowly it was getting decline by passing year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main trends for all appliances and the housework hours. However, the analysis is hampered by inaccurate reporting of data. For instance, stating that housework was '50%' in 1920 is incorrect based on the provided chart, which shows 50 hours. Furthermore, the description of the washing machine trend as a 'roller coaster' is informal and lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. While the overview is present, the lack of accurate data interpretation and the tendency to describe trends in a non-academic manner limit the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'And then the number reach by 100%' and 'And between the year 1940 to 2019'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While there is an overall progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive use of 'And' at the start of sentences detract from the flow of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'the number were surprisingly increase' and 'the number reach by' demonstrate a lack of control over word forms and collocations. There is an attempt to use some descriptive language, but it is often imprecise or inappropriate for an academic context, such as 'roller coaster'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision or variety expected at higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('the number were', 'the percentage... were already been increased') and tense usage. While there is an attempt at complex sentence structures, they are often faulty, leading to awkward phrasing. Punctuation is basic, and the control over sentence construction is inconsistent. The errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader, though the general meaning remains understandable.
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