Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This chart is illustrating the modify ownership of electrical appliance and number of time spent doing domestic work in house in one country between 1920 and 2019.

There are another innovation machines, these machine were bit utilizing among the 1920 and 2019 such as worker machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner.

Overall, three different items were completed differ machine like that washing machine, refrigerator and also vacuum.

the washing machine average percentage in 19020 between 2019 and refrigerator peak highest percentage in one country among the 1920 and 2019.

And third vacuum machine minimum percentage in country 1920 till 2019.

firstly, if the analyze the washing machine maximum percentage was 40 to 70% between 1920 and 2019.

Another innovation technology for domestic work, the refrigerator was consumed household with electrical appliance highest percentage 0 to 100% between 1920 to 2019.

And the another item was vacuum, and that was used housework in household in one between 1920 and 2019 were 30% till 100%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by discussing the changes in appliance ownership and time spent on housework between 1920 and 2019. However, the overview is extremely confused and fails to clearly summarize the main trends or include the data for time spent doing housework. Several statements are inaccurate or difficult to interpret, such as claiming the refrigerator reached 0 to 100% or that appliances were utilized 'among the 1920 and 2019'. While the student identifies the three main appliances, the lack of a coherent and accurate overview combined with underdeveloped details places this response at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is poorly structured and lacks a logical overall progression. Paragraphing is highly erratic, with fragmented sentences standing alone as paragraphs (e.g., 'And third vacuum machine minimum percentage...'). Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or repetitive (such as 'and then', 'another', and 'firstly'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information between the data points. This level of organization reflects Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and often misused. The student employs incorrect word forms and collocations throughout, such as 'modify ownership' instead of 'changing ownership', 'innovation machines' instead of 'innovative appliances', and 'worker machine' instead of 'washing machine'. There are numerous word choice errors that strain the reader and impede comprehension. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a clear report, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response contains frequent and severe errors in tense usage, prepositions, and sentence structures, such as 'number of time spent' and 'was consumed household with electrical appliance highest percentage'. Simple sentence forms dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are invariably faulty, often resulting in ungrammatical strings that obscure the intended meaning. Punctuation is also erratic. This demonstrates Band 4.0 grammatical performance.

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