Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two charts illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in one country between 1920 and 2019.

In 1920 , 40% household was use washing machine . and no one use refrigerator however,30% household was use vacuum cleaner .

Although, In 1940 to 1960 there was large number of change occur in these year .

Washing machine is change 50% to 70% and refrigerator change 55% to 90% . It was a biggest number of seen in these year. vacuum cleaner is change 50% to 70% in these year.

In 1980 to 2019 , These years slightly change was occur . and washing machine are stop it approximately 75% and vacuum cleaner or refrigerator is almost same in 2000 to 2019 and reached it maximum 100%.

On the other hand , 1920 to 2019 number of hours of housework per week in per household is,

The largest percentage is 50% in 1920 moreover, the smallest percentage are 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of both charts, such as the trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the reporting of data is inaccurate and confusing in several places, such as stating that 'no one use refrigerator' in 1920 when the chart shows a starting point, and misinterpreting the final percentages. Furthermore, the second chart regarding housework hours is extremely underdeveloped, stopping abruptly after mentioning two percentages without proper synthesis or comparison. This falls short of fully presenting a clear overview and well-supported key features, aligning the performance with a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The organisation of the text is hindered by disjointed paragraphing and poor overall progression. Many sentences are isolated, starting with standalone fragments like 'In 1920 , 40% household was use washing machine . and no one use refrigerator however,30% household was use vacuum cleaner .' Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or poorly punctuated, such as repetitive transitions ('In 1940 to 1960', 'In 1980 to 2019'). There is no clear logical progression guiding the reader smoothly through the data trends, resulting in a Band 4.5 descriptor profile.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple functional terms like 'change', 'use', and 'number'. There are frequent lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'washing machine is change 50% to 70%' and 'reached it maximum 100%'. The writer attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'refrigerator', 'vacuum cleaner', 'housework'), but the overall lexical range is limited and inadequate for a higher band, corresponding to a Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring persistent and fundamental errors in basic sentence structures, tense usage, and verb forms (e.g., 'household was use', 'no one use', 'there was large number of change occur'). Simple sentences are heavily error-prone, and attempts at more complex structures are either absent or entirely ungrammatical. Punctuation and spacing errors (extra spaces before punctuation marks) are also pervasive. These frequent errors continually impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.

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