Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given figure show the information about the ownership of electric appliances and amount of spendind time in doing houework in households in one country between 1920and 2019.
The washing machine and refrigerator reaches its maximam but vacuum cleaner have low percentage.
The percentage of household in washing machine in 1920 is 30% which increases to 90% in 1960, Then reach to maximum value to 100% in 1980 and remain same from 1980to 2019. The percentage of household in refrigerator in 1920is 0% and there was a increase in 1940 which is 55% and reach to 90% in 1960 then it reaches to its maximum value in 1980 which is 100% and remain same from 1980 to 2019. The percentage of household in vacuum cleaner, It started from 30% in 1920 and continously increases from 1920 to 2000 on its peak value which is 100% and remain same from 2000 to 2019 on its maximum value 100%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the provided charts by reporting some main features regarding electrical appliances, such as the trends for washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners between 1920 and 2019. However, the overview is incomplete as the response entirely omits any mention of the second chart regarding the amount of time spent doing housework. Furthermore, data is sometimes reported mechanically without a clear, cohesive selection of overall trends. According to the band descriptors, because the response addresses the task only partially and omits a major data set, it fits best into Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay displays some basic organization with an introductory paragraph followed by body sentences, but there is a clear lack of overall logical progression. Paragraphing is highly underdeveloped, with the core data crammed into one long, repetitive block of text. Cohesive devices are used in a very limited and mechanical way, relying heavily on repetitive phrases like 'The percentage of household in...' rather than utilizing a variety of referencing or substitution. There is no clear paragraphing strategy used to separate the different categories. Consequently, these organizational limitations firmly place the response at Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. The student repeatedly relies on basic phrasing such as 'percentage of household in', 'reaches its maximam', and 'remain same from... to...'. There are several noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, including 'spendind time' instead of 'time spent', 'houework' instead of 'housework', and 'maximam' instead of 'maximum'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic data points, the frequent errors and lack of a varied lexical range restrict the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are numerous agreement and tense errors, such as 'The given figure show' instead of 'shows', 'washing machine and refrigerator reaches' instead of 'reach', and 'there was a increase' instead of 'an increase'. Punctuation is also problematic, including run-on sentences and missing capitalization or spacing, such as '1920and 2019'. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader due to poor grammatical control, the response aligns with Band 4.0.
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