Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
In percentage of households with electrical appliances is that in 1920 percentage of washing machine is 40 and refrigerator is 30 and vacuum cleaner is 0 but in 1940 percentage of washing machine is 60 , refrigerator is 50 and vacuum cleaner is 50 after some years in 1960 percentage of washing machine is 60, refrigerator is 70 and vacuum cleaner is 90 but in 1980 percentage of washing machine is 60 , refrigerator is 90 and vacuum is 60 but in 2000 percentage of washing machine is 70 , refrigerator is 90 and vacuum is 70 but in 2019 percentage of washing machine is 70 and refrigerator is 90 and vacuum is 70.5
the second paragraph is that In 1920, households spent about 50 hours per week on domestic chores. This figure fell steadily to around 35 hours in 1940 and 20 hours by 1960. After declining further to roughly 15 hours in 1980, it reached only about 10 hours per week in both 2000 and 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to report data from both charts, but the response falls short in several areas. Firstly, the student begins by copying the prompt instructions word-for-word ('The charts below show the changes in ownership...'), which is heavily penalised as it does not contribute to the word count or task fulfillment. Furthermore, the description of the first chart consists of a massive, unpunctuated run-on sentence listing numerous figures, many of which contain factual inaccuracies when compared to the source data (e.g., stating the vacuum cleaner ownership was 0% in 1920 when the chart shows 30%). There is no clear overview provided. However, the second paragraph successfully reports the trends for housework hours. Due to significant data inaccuracies and lack of an overview, this criterion achieves a band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text suffers from severe structural and organizational issues. The entire first paragraph of the report is one endless, convoluted sentence held together by repeated coordinating conjunctions ('but') and listing data year by year without logical grouping or paragraph breaks. There are no cohesive devices used to guide the reader smoothly through the appliance ownership data. The second paragraph is much better organized, featuring logical sequencing ('In 1920... This figure fell steadily...') and clear progression. However, the overall arrangement of the text is heavily flawed due to the lack of paragraphing and poor cohesion in the first half. This warrants a band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'percentage of', 'washing machine', 'refrigerator', and 'vacuum cleaner'. There are no attempts to use less common vocabulary or paraphrasing. Furthermore, the student repeatedly misuses the word 'percentage' in place of 'proportion' or simply stating the data values (e.g., 'percentage of washing machine is 40'). Spelling is generally acceptable for common words, but the lack of range and lexical inaccuracy severely limit the score. This performance aligns with the band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the first section of the text. The first paragraph lacks proper punctuation entirely, consisting of a single, massive run-on sentence joined by coordinating conjunctions, which demonstrates a severe lack of control over complex sentence structures. There are also agreement and preposition issues. The second paragraph shows an improvement, containing accurate simple and complex sentences ('This figure fell steadily to around 35 hours...'). Because the grammatical accuracy is divided—with the first half being completely unpunctuated and chaotic, and the second half being reasonably accurate—an overall band of 5.0 is appropriate.
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