Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs illustrates the shiftings of owning eletrical accessories and the how much time people usually spent on their home tasks such as washing cloths , preparing meals and cleaning.
Overall, there is a dramatic increase in the number of people who have refrigerator and vacuum cleaner. However their are some fluctuations in percentage of Washing machine owners throughout the period. On the other hand there is a steady decrease in the number of hours who spent on house work by people.
To begin with, In the bigening of 1920 there are no house which have Refrigerator. But the number dramatically increased in next 20 years and around above 50% of people have refrigerator in their homes. Eventhough the percentage got doubled in 1980 and remain same throughout the next years. Furthermore the percentage of Vacuum cleaner ownership also saw a steady increase starting from just above 30% and jumped to 100% at the end of 2019. However owning Washing Machine experienced a fluctuation in from 1960 to 1980. Since then it also saw a steady increase and reached at above 60% in 2019.
Nevertheless, there was 50% of people who done their home work in 1920. However the percentages start dropping and in the end of 1980 there was only above 10% of people who do their house work. Eventhough the percentage remain almost same throughout next 39 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of appliance ownership and housework hours, and makes some relevant comparisons. An overview is successfully provided in the second paragraph, outlining the main trends. However, there are some minor factual inaccuracies regarding specific data points. For instance, the text states that in 1920 'there are no house which have Refrigerator', whereas the chart shows 2%, and claims that refrigerator ownership reached 100% in 1980, which matches the data, but states that hours spent on housework dropped to 'above 10%' by the end of 1980 and remained same, whereas the chart shows a continuous decline down to 11 hours by 2019. Despite these data misreadings, the overall trends are captured adequately, earning a solid band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement and is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the specific data. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall', 'However', 'To begin with', and 'Nevertheless'. However, referencing and transitions are at times mechanical or slightly awkward, as seen in 'In the bigening of 1920 there are no house...' and 'Eventhough the percentage got doubled'. Paragraphing is generally appropriate, though paragraph three is a bit dense with multiple data points clumped together. Progression is evident, but occasional lapses in logical sequencing keep this criterion at a band 6.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts to use less common items such as 'fluctuations', 'dramatic increase', and 'ownership'. However, there are numerous spelling errors and incorrect word choices throughout the text, including 'eletrical' (electrical), 'accessories' (appliances), 'cloths' (clothes), 'bigening' (beginning), and 'home work' instead of housework. Collocations are occasionally unnatural, such as 'owning eletrical accessories' and 'number of hours who spent on house work'. While the writer communicates the main points, the frequency of lexical errors and limited precision restricts the score to a band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples include 'The line graphs illustrates' (plural/singular mismatch), 'there are no house which have', 'people who have refrigerator' (missing article), 'hours who spent', and 'there was 50% of people who done'. Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with lowercase letters at the start of sentences following periods and missing commas after transitional phrases. These frequent errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response at a band 5.
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