Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The multi line graph between year and percentage shows the similarities in some points like in 1960 vaccum cleaner and washing machine got the same percentage which is 70 percent moreover in 2000 refrigerator and vaccum cleaner have same percentage which is 100 and the lowest point is in 1920 and the peaked position of graph is in 2019.In the 2nd graph the maximum position is in 1920 which is 50 hours while the minimum is in 2019 that is 10.In conclusion the use of vaccum cleaner is the most in 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, stopping at only 92 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts to report a few specific data points, such as the 70 percent ownership for vacuum cleaners and washing machines in 1960, and mentions the house-work hours dropping to 10 in 2019, the overview is extremely limited and lacks a comprehensive summary of the overall trends across both charts. Furthermore, there is no concluding synthesis of the main visual data beyond a brief, isolated remark.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing and mechanical cohesion. Almost the entire response is compressed into a single, dense block of text, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Although a few basic cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'moreover' and 'in conclusion', the overall structure lacks logical organisation and paragraph breaks. Referencing is basic, and the lack of clear separation between the description of the appliance chart and the housework hours chart severely disrupts readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms like 'percentage', 'point', and 'graph'. There are also spelling errors present, such as 'vaccum' instead of 'vacuum'. While the student manages to convey basic numerical data, the lexical range is too limited to demonstrate flexibility or precision. Uncommon or academic lexical items are entirely absent, and the overall vocabulary choice remains at a simple level appropriate for lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structure is extremely limited, consisting mostly of run-on simple and compound sentences strung together with coordinating conjunctions and few punctuation marks. For instance, sentences like 'the multi line graph between year and percentage shows the similarities in some points like in 1960 vaccum cleaner and washing machine got the same percentage which is 70 percent moreover in 2000...' demonstrate a complete lack of punctuation and control over complex sentence forms. Frequent grammatical inaccuracies and missing punctuation make the text difficult to parse.
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