Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph demonstrates the data about variation in buyers of electronic instruments along with that range of years spent working at home in specific nation in the years of 1920 to 2019.
It is clearly observed that, at starting no one have refrigeratior and some people have vaccume cleaner while at the begining of second century every householdès contained refrigerator and vacum cleaner. While few contain washing machine.
To begin with The washing machine, in 1920 ; 40% of poppulation held it. and this conservation rose stedily till 4 decades . After that marginally plunged and again surge and reached about 3 quartors people for specific countrieès residents till 2019.
Furthermore, refrigerator contained zero intrests during 1920. despite 1920, it climbe dramatically and under 60 years all household owned their particular appliances till end.
Meanwhile, vaccum clear adepted lowest interest among residents initially. But it steadily grew their occupency in house. from 2000, all people from particular country were using their own vacum cleaner as refrigerator.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the trends in household appliance ownership and hours of housework. However, the report omits the housework trend entirely in the body paragraphs, only mentioning it vaguely in the introduction as the 'range of years spent working at home'. Furthermore, the data interpretation contains noticeable inaccuracies, such as stating that 'no one have refrigeratior' in 1920 (the graph shows 2%), and confusing percentages with absolute numbers. While the overall trends are identified, the lack of complete coverage of both charts and imprecise data reporting place this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, including an introduction and several body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by awkward phrasing and poor referencing. Transitional phrases such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Meanwhile' are used, but they fail to create a smooth, cohesive flow because the sentences within and between paragraphs lack logical connection. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat haphazard, leading to an overall choppy structure that aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and often unnatural or misused. Examples include 'electronic instruments' instead of electrical appliances, 'buyers' instead of owners, and 'conservation' instead of percentage or figure. There are also persistent spelling and word-form errors, such as 'refrigeratior', 'vaccume', 'poppulation', 'stedily', and 'adepted'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary ('dramatically', 'marginally plunged'), the high frequency of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes restricts the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for the attempt at task-specific terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that frequently contain serious errors. Examples of faulty structures include 'at starting no one have refrigeratior', 'every householdès contained', and 'from 2000, all people from particular country were using their own vacum cleaner as refrigerator'. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced semicolons and periods disrupting sentence boundaries. Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 to 4.5 profile, so a score of 4.5 is appropriate.
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