Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the multiline chart depicts the imformation in term of percentile of buying electrical gadgets and time used in housework in households in a nation in year 1920 and 2019
on analysing the chart it can be clearly seen that usage of washing machine begin with 40 percent in initial year and it follow upward path till 1960 upto 70 percent and follow fluctuated path and ends to 71 percent in final year.whereas usage of vacuum cleaner increased everyyear till 100 percent in year 2000
moving further it became lucid that usage of vaccume cleaner increase constanltly but remain constant till final year on the other hand usage of refrigerator starts from 0 percent from final year but it goes upto 100 percent in 1980 and remain constant till final year
hence it became evident that usage of vaccume cleaner and refrigerator follows upward path whereas usage of washing machine fluctate every year
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the trends shown in the two charts regarding electrical appliance ownership and hours of housework. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that the usage of the refrigerator 'starts from 0 percent from final year' (likely meaning 1920), whereas the chart shows it started at 2%. Furthermore, the description of the trends is somewhat repetitive and fails to clearly contrast the hours spent on housework against the appliance ownership figures, which is a main feature of the data. Key overviews are missing, and some data points are misread or poorly articulated. This places the response in the band 5 range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks proper paragraphing, appearing as a single dense block of text with virtually no punctuation, capitalisation, or full stops. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitions like 'moving further' and 'hence it became evident' appearing awkwardly. There is no clear overall progression or logical structure guiding the reader through the distinct charts and their relationship. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which appliance is being discussed. This level of organisation corresponds to a band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors such as 'imformation', 'percentile' instead of 'percentage', 'vaccume', 'constanltly', and 'fluctate'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'upward path' and 'fluctuated path', but these are used mechanically and inaccurately. The range of vocabulary is quite limited and barely adequate to convey the intended meaning, causing some strain for the reader. This performance aligns with band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is severely lacking throughout the response. There is a complete absence of standard punctuation, capitalisation, and sentence boundaries; the entire text is written as a run-on string of clauses connected by lowercase letters. Simple sentence structures dominate, and attempts at complex clauses result in frequent errors, such as missing prepositions and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'usage of refrigerator starts from 0 percent from final year'). Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, fitting the band 4 descriptors.
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