Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The Line graph below show the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, Households number of percentage electrical appliances increase in 1920 to 2019,on the others side refrigeratoir and vacuum cleaner are similar number shown. Number of houseworker hours per week are decrease after years by years in 2019.
On the first hand, most of households increase 100 pecentage because, they have many things faces and avilables of refrigerator peak in 1920 to 2019. Vacuum cleaner and Washing machine are both similar starts rised in 30% or 40%, in 1980 washing machine are decrease in 70% to 60%. Vacuum cleaner are avilable in 100% of households in 2019 and washing machine are 66% households pickup electrical appliances their house.
On the other hand, after the electical applinces householder bought then houseworker = washing clothse and cleaning. These type works numbers of hours per week are decrease 50 % in 1920 to in 2019 0% overall hosueworks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The candidate attempts to address the prompt by describing the two charts, but the response falls short of fully presenting a clear, coherent overview of the main trends. While some data points are mentioned, such as refrigerators reaching 100% and housework hours decreasing, many statements are heavily confused, factually inaccurate based on the chart, or completely incomprehensible (e.g. claiming housework dropped to 0%). The overview is weak and lacks precision in summarizing the overall developments across the 99-year period. Consequently, the performance aligns with Band 4.5 descriptors as it struggles to report the data accurately and coherently.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which shows an attempt at structure, but the internal organization and progression are severely hindered by awkward phrasing and confusing transitions like 'On the first hand' and 'On the other hand'. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or mechanically, making the logical relationships between sentences difficult to follow. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall progression lacks the clear logical flow required for higher bands. This performance reflects Band 4.0 standards for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate or non-existent in standard English (e.g., 'refrigeratoir', 'houseworker', 'avilables', 'applinces'). The student attempts to use some topic-specific terms like 'electrical appliances' and 'refrigerator', but lexical control is weak throughout. Word choices and collocations are frequently flawed, which places a heavy strain on the reader and prevents communication of precise information. This fits the Band 4.0 descriptors for Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains frequent, severe errors in basic sentence structure, tense usage, and agreement (e.g., 'The Line graph below show', 'Households number of percentage electrical appliances increase', 'washing machine are decrease in 70% to 60%'). Simple sentences are often incorrectly constructed, and attempts at more complex structures result in completely ungrammatical and unintelligible clauses. Punctuation is also problematic. These frequent errors distort meaning and place the response firmly in Band 4.0.
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