Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line charts illustrate the information about how much time was spend in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.The data has been measured in percentage.
To start with, electrical appliances,in 1920, from the starting years fefrigerator start with 0% and rapedlly increased in 1940 with 55% then 50% rise was seen from 1940 to 1980 with 100%.similar trend was seen from 1980 to 2019 with 100%.In washing machine, starts eith 30% in 1920 and rise with 30% in 1960. small decline was shown in 1980 with 65% then rapedlly increase from 1980 to 2019 with 80%.
Moving further,In vacuum cleaner, it increased 30% to 100% from 1920 to 2019.In household works , in 1920 it was on the peak with 50% but dramitically decreased from 50% to 20% in 1960 and similar trend was seen from 1960 to 2019 with 15%.
Overall,rapedlly increased was seen in vacum cleaner with high percentage in all years. in household works it decline and then follow similar trend.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the charts, such as the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that the refrigerator started with 0% in 1920 (it was actually around 2%) and reached 100% in 1980, but then claims a similar trend was seen to 2019 without mentioning it remained at 100%. Furthermore, the description of housework hours is confused, stating it was 'on the peak with 50%' and then using percentages instead of hours. The overview is overly simplistic and contains factual errors regarding the trends. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses some basic cohesive devices like 'To start with' and 'Moving further', but the overall organization lacks smooth progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body paragraphs are disjointed and clump multiple distinct trends together into confusing blocks of text. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data point is being discussed. For example, sentences jump between appliances and time spent without clear transitions. While there is a basic structure with an introduction and an overall concluding sentence, the lack of clear logical progression and mechanical cohesion keeps this at a lower band.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors. Words like 'rapedlly' (rapidly), 'fefrigerator' (refrigerator), 'eith' (with), and 'dramitically' (dramatically) detract from the quality of the response. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and incorrect forms of words—such as using percentages instead of hours for housework, or saying appliances 'start with' rather than 'stood at'—show a limited lexical range that struggles with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that often feature faulty structures. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing spaces after periods and commas (e.g., '1920.The', 'appliances,in'). Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are problematic throughout the text, as seen in phrases like 'how much time was spend' and 'refrigerator start'. These frequent grammatical errors cause some difficulty for the reader, though the core meaning of the comparison can generally be guessed.
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