Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line chart shows about the household of the percentage of household in the electrical appliances and numbers of hours of housework perweekin the year between 1920 to 2019.
Overall, in 2019 vaccum cleaner and refrigerator are in the top in the terms of electrical appliances but in the 2019 housework in terms of the hours per week reached to the 10 hours per week.
in 1920 refrigerator is on the 0 % then the it reached and the 2019
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 80 words compared to the required 150-word minimum, which heavily penalises Task Achievement. Furthermore, the writing is incomplete and trails off mid-sentence (e.g., 'then the it reached and the 2019'). While the student attempts to introduce the topic and mentions a few general trends—such as vacuum cleaners and refrigerators being high in ownership by 2019 and housework hours decreasing—the information is extremely sparse, lacks a fully developed overview, and fails to report the main features or comparisons required by the task. Because the response is fragmented and incomplete, it falls short of the Band 4 requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows an attempt to structure an introductory sentence and basic body points, but the lack of completion disrupts any overall progression. Paragraphing is disjointed, with broken sentences and isolated clauses (e.g., 'in 1920 refrigerator is on the 0 % then the it reached and the 2019'). Cohesive devices are minimal and clumsy, and referencing is faulty. There is no clear logical organisation or progression throughout the text, placing it firmly at Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors and poor collocations (e.g., 'household of the percentage of household in the electrical appliances'). Words are often misused or awkwardly combined, such as saying appliances are 'in the top in the terms of'. The range is extremely limited and inadequate for discussing statistical data, causing noticeable strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical structures are severely limited, and the text contains multiple major errors that impede communication. Sentences are awkwardly constructed and frequently broken, such as the incomplete final sentence ('then the it reached and the 2019'). There are persistent errors in preposition usage, article placement, and verb tense consistency. Due to the lack of error-free sentences and the high frequency of structural breakdowns, the response matches Band 4.
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