Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar charts illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and a lot of time spent doing their housework in households in one country between in
1920and 2019.
Overall, this include the alter in dominion of electrical appliances to complete their housework in household in one nation and the percentage of working appliances of hour per week could be calculated according to the year passes.
First of all, in 1920 refrigerator is the main light appliances in household and it is only one percentage. In addition, many light things can be used in home such as in 1920 the both appliances such as washing machine and vacuum cleaner are also used, it was only 40% washing and 30% cleaner. At the year passes the purpose of all the electrical system is increased due to growing number of population all over the world.
In contrast, numbers of hours per week also count in 1920 it was at 50 but in 2019 it is recorded as 10 only in the charts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to report on the provided charts, but the response suffers from significant inaccuracies in data interpretation and a failure to correctly identify the visual format, referring to line graphs as "bar charts". For instance, the student states that in 1920 the refrigerator was "only one percentage," whereas the data shows it was 2%. Furthermore, the description of trends is vague and overly general, failing to effectively compare appliance ownership with the decline in weekly housework hours. While the response touches upon both graphs, the lack of accurate data reporting and misunderstanding of core trends keep this performance at a lower band level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The organization of the text is basic and lacks clear progression. The response opens with an abrupt introduction that contains several mechanical flaws and incorrect chart identification. Paragraphing is rudimentary, with sentences grouped together without a logical flow of ideas. Transitional phrases are misused or absent, resulting in a disjointed structure. For example, expressions like "First of all" and "In contrast" are awkwardly applied and do not establish a coherent relationship between the data points. Pronoun referencing and overall cohesion need substantial improvement to guide the reader smoothly through the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that impede communication. The student misuses vocabulary related to data analysis, such as referring to "bar charts" instead of line graphs, and employing unnatural phrasing like "alter in dominion" and "light appliances". Collocations are frequently incorrect, as seen in expressions like "the both appliances" and "purpose of all the electrical system is increased". Spelling and word formation errors also occur throughout the text, reflecting a basic control of vocabulary that is inadequate for an academic task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a heavy reliance on simple sentence structures and frequent errors in complex constructions. The text contains numerous tense inconsistencies and agreement issues, such as "refrigerator is the main light appliances" and "numbers of hours per week also count in 1920 it was at 50". Punctuation is also problematic, leading to run-on sentences and clauses that are difficult to parse. Because errors are frequent and often obscure the intended meaning, the grammar falls squarely within the lower band criteria.
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