Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below illustrate the differences in ownership of electrical equipments and the period of time spend doing housework in households in a specific country from [redacted phone].
In 1940, ownership of refrigerator surprisingly rose to almost 55% from being at 0% in past 1920. The ownership of fridge equals 90% in 1960. After two decades, the households owneing cooling fridge rose to 100% and stayed at same level for next four decades. Vaccum cleaners are quit common from 1920 with 30% ownership and goes upward to 50% after 10 years. Total 70% of households were owening dust cleaners in 1960.
Washing machines owned by 70% house owners 1960 until gradual fall to just above 60% in 1980.
From past 1920, remarkable 50 hours were spend by the household in doing housework and starts to fall, almost 35 hours in 7 days during 1940. In 1980 and 2000, the number of hours spend per week by house owner in doing work of house was just above 10 hours. At last, in 2019 it reaches almost equal to 10 hours of doing house work during 7 daus period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address both charts, providing data points for appliance ownership and housework hours. However, the selection of data is somewhat erratic and lacks a cohesive overview. For instance, the mention of refrigerators rising to 'almost 55%' in 1940 is accurate, but the description misses key comparative trends between appliances (such as vacuum cleaners starting higher than refrigerators in 1920). Furthermore, the summary of washing machines in the third paragraph is fragmented and lacks a complete sentence structure ('Washing machines owned by 70% house owners 1960...'). While main features are touched upon, the lack of an overarching summary and incomplete data tracking for certain years limits the development, placing this response at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs that attempt to group information by appliance and time period. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and poor sentence structuring. For example, paragraphs are fragmented, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as shifting abruptly between appliances without clear signposting. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate ('At last, in 2019 it reaches...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion, resulting in a disjointed reading experience that aligns best with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but contains noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. The student uses terms like 'electrical equipments' (equipment is uncountable), 'cooling fridge', and 'dust cleaners'. There are also spelling errors such as 'owneing', 'Vaccum', and 'quit' instead of 'quite'. While attempts are made to use less common vocabulary like 'remarkable' and 'gradual fall', the inaccuracies in morphology and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor well.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple constructions and awkward attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing verbs ('The ownership of fridge equals 90% in 1960', 'Washing machines owned by 70% house owners 1960 until gradual fall'), incorrect prepositions ('spend by the household'), and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is basic, and sentences such as 'From past 1920, remarkable 50 hours were spend...' demonstrate persistent structural flaws that impede clarity, warranting a Band 5.0.
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