Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the line graph illustrate the changes happend in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent in during housework in household in a country between 1920 and 2019.

overall,the vccum cleaner and washing machne were highly hired by household but washing maching have flucation. while the refregerator was lowest. regarding the amount of time spent on housework, there was a sufficient decline over period.

in 1920, around 40% of washing machine owned while refregerator was empty and vaccum cleaner was accounted for 30% . the owned of refrigerator roseand recorded for 50% in 1940 whereas, washing machine and vannumcleaner accounted for 60% and 50% respectively. in 1960 , the ownership of refrigerator growth and made up for 90% , ownershipof washing machin and vaccum cleaner were slightly increase and madeup for 60% by both. ownership of refrigerator and vaccm cleanng growth and recorded for 100% and 90% respectively while the ownershp of washin machine flucatuated and madeup for 60%. by 2000 , owning of refrigerator remain constant at 100, whereas, washing machine and vaccum cleaner rose mad accounted for 70% and 100 % respectively.

by 2019 aowning of washing maching growth and adeup for aproximately 80% while other two remain same.

meanwhile the number of hours of housework per household fell steadily. in a920 , household spent approximately 50 hour per housework. this figure decline to around 35 house in 1940 and 20 hours in 1960. by 1980, it had fallen to about 15 hurs, where it remain almost unchaged untill 2000. finally, the figure decreased further to approximately 10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both charts. An overview is provided, noting the general upward trend in appliance ownership and the downward trend in housework hours. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and imprecise data references when compared to the visual data. For instance, the student states that in 1920 the refrigerator was 'empty' when the data shows 2%, and there are numerous misreadings of percentages and years throughout the body paragraphs (such as misstating 1980 and 2000 figures for washing machines and refrigerators). Despite these data handling errors, the main trends are captured, placing the response at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs covering appliance ownership and housework hours respectively. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor paragraph structuring and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Sentences are often crammed together without appropriate punctuation or transition words, making the flow disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the text lacks adequate cohesive management. Paragraphing is attempted but used insufficiently and inappropriately due to the run-on nature of the sentences. This aligns with Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on words like 'ownership', 'appliance', 'housework', and basic verbs like 'rose', 'made up', and 'growth'. There are numerous severe spelling errors throughout the text, including 'illustrate' (illustrates), 'happend', 'vccum cleaner', 'machne', 'refregerator', 'vannumcleaner', 'vaccm cleanng', 'ownershp', 'machin', 'flucatuated', and 'aproximately'. These errors in word choice and spelling cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and restrict the lexical score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent, persistent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'the line graph illustrate', 'changes happend', 'washing maching have flucation', 'the owned of refrigerator rose', and 'household spent approximately 50 hour per housework'. Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected, with sentences starting with lowercase letters and clauses run together improperly. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors.

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