Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given charts provide information about ownership of electrical appliances and compare with the amount of time spent housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
To begin with, it is clearly evident that the number of households electrical appliances is dramatically increasing in 2019, as compare to 1940, the percentage is only 50%, however in 2019 the percentage increases 30% to 40%.
On the other hand, hours of housework per week and per home, we noticed, the beginning percentage is 50% but we saw a dramatic decline in 2019, the percentage is only 10% in 2019. Furthermore, the electrical appliance in which Washing machines, Refrigerators and Vacuum cleaners are the source of electrical usage in country. Refrigerators demand raised in 1940 to 2000, washing machines started to boost in 1920 to 1960, after-that it remains constant. Vacuum cleaners is going to used by homes mostly in 1940 than it's continues to increase until 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both charts, but the treatment of data is frequently inaccurate, confused, and imprecise. For instance, the student states that 'the percentage is only 50%, however in 2019 the percentage increases 30% to 40%,' which misreads the values and trends from the graphs. While an overview is attempted, the lack of accurate data reporting and flawed comparisons mean the response only partially satisfies the task requirements. Key trends, such as refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reaching 100% by 2000, are poorly articulated or missed entirely, aligning this response with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear overall progression and suffers from poor paragraphing, being condensed into a single massive block of text after the introduction. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'To begin with,' 'On the other hand,' and 'Furthermore,' which do not logically connect the contrasting data points. Referencing is also weak, with ambiguous pronouns and phrases like 'the electrical appliance in which Washing machines...' causing confusion for the reader. The logical flow breaks down frequently, limiting the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on general organizational attempts.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. The student relies heavily on simple words and produces awkward collocations and unidiomatic phrasing, such as 'spend housework,' 'Refrigerators demand raised,' and 'washing machines started to boost.' There are also issues with word forms, such as using 'usage' where another noun or verb is needed. While the topic-specific vocabulary (washing machine, refrigerator, vacuum cleaner) is present from the prompt, the range is limited and noticeable errors in word choice occasionally cause confusion for the reader, placing it firmly in Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex or compound attempts are heavily flawed, resulting in run-on sentences, missing verbs, and incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'the electrical appliance in which Washing machines, Refrigerators and Vacuum cleaners are the source of electrical usage in country'). Frequent errors in tense consistency and clause structure are evident throughout the text, such as 'Vacuum cleaners is going to used by homes mostly in 1940 than it's continues to increase.' These persistent errors cause strain for the reader and reflect Band 5 descriptors.
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