Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The provided graphs illustrate how the proportion of household owning electrical appliancesshifted alongside the hourse dedicated to domestic chores in a single nation from 1920 to 2019 .

The overall, of this graph the washing machine was slightly increased and then fluctuated and then go significantly increased till last .The Refrigerator was on bottom but after a while it go dramatically increased and goes on the peak level of graph .On the other-hand the Vacuum cleaner was below to waashing machine the vacuum cleaner was frequently increased and met to the vacuum cleaner percentage . Therefore the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner are on the top of the graph .

The graph illustarte that washing machine was on the 40% in 1920 of household then it slightly increased and reached out 60% in 1940 and then it dramatically increased got the figure 70% in 1960 then it further drop it percentage and reached to approximately 61% in 1980 afer a while its dramatically increased and reached at 71% in 2019.Hence the refrigerator was on 0% in 1920 but it goes dramatically increased reached on 50% in 1940 again it go high and reached at 90% in 1960 and again it goes to 100% in 1980 and it is till on peak level till 2019.The vacuum cleaner was held on 30% in 1920 but after some time it goes to 50% in 1940 and again dramatically rise reached on 70% in 1960 in 1980 it was slightly increased at 90% and in 2000 to 2019 it was still on 100% of household .

The number of per week was 1920 at 50% and goes down in 2019 it was on 10%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the charts, mentioning the trends for washing machines, refrigerators, vacuum cleaners, and housework hours between 1920 and 2019. However, the response lacks a clear and coherent overall summary. There are several inaccuracies and awkward phrasing in describing the data points (e.g., stating the refrigerator was at 0% in 1920 and reached 50% in 1940, whereas the graph shows roughly 2%). Furthermore, the final paragraph regarding housework hours is extremely brief and inaccurate ('10%'). The lack of a proper overview and imprecise reporting of data place this response firmly in Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely disrupted by poor sentence construction and repetitive transitions like 'and then' and 'again it go high'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. The introductory overview is confusingly phrased, failing to set up a clear structural map for the report. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. This warrants a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-formation and spelling errors (e.g., 'appliancesshifted', 'hourse', 'illuste', 'waashing'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'dramatically increased' and 'fluctuated', but these are often used with incorrect collocations or ungrammatical forms (e.g., 'go significantly increased', 'met to the vacuum cleaner percentage'). The range is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas, but errors strain the reader throughout, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and simple sentences are frequently malformed. There are persistent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'the washing machine was slightly increased', 'reached on 50%', 'the number of per week was 1920 at 50%'). Complex sentence attempts almost invariably result in major structural errors. Punctuation is also poorly managed with missing spaces and run-on structures. These frequent, dense errors impede communication and correspond to a Band 4.0.

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