Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph compares the proportion of households who owned electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, it is clearly seen that the proportion of households in refrigerator and vacuum cleaner recorded the dominant factor, while washing machine was used by the least proportion followed by number of hours of housework started to declined and follow the opposite trend.

The proportion of households consumed a washing machine was 40% in 1920 and peak in 1960 by 70%. The proportion fell down in 1980 by 65% before reaching 70% in 2000 and in 2019 it represented the highest number of washing machine throughout the period. Furthermore, the rate of households consumed refrigerator

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response only partially addresses the task requirements due to a few significant limitations. Crucially, the length requirement is not met, as the text stops abruptly at 123 words, well short of the 150-word minimum. Regarding content, the overview attempts to highlight main features but is confusing and inaccurate in places, such as claiming that 'households in refrigerator and vacuum cleaner recorded the dominant factor' or that households 'consumed' appliances rather than owned them. While some data points from the start of the period are mentioned, the incomplete nature of the response and lack of a finished overview prevent a fuller development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response shows some basic attempts at organisation, but there is no clear overall progression or successful paragraph structure. The essay breaks off mid-sentence, leaving ideas isolated and undeveloped. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'Furthermore, the rate of households consumed refrigerator', which disrupts the logical flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a proper conclusion or fully formed body paragraphs means information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, reflecting a minimally adequate range for the task. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and odd collocations throughout the text, such as using 'consumed' instead of 'owned' when referring to household appliances (e.g., 'households consumed a washing machine'), and awkward phrasing like 'recorded the dominant factor'. Word formation errors are also present, such as 'started to declined' instead of 'declined'. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to a lower level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple or attempting basic complex forms that frequently contain errors. There are frequent grammatical mistakes in verb tenses, voice, and prepositions, such as 'households who owned... and amount of time spent', 'the proportion of households in refrigerator', and the incomplete structure 'followed by number of hours of housework started to declined'. Punctuation and syntactic control are weak, and these frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader.

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