Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrates the changes in ownershio of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
A glance at the chart reveals that households with electrical appliances of vacuum cleaner was increased,Along with the refrigerator rapidly increased with the time.Percentage home device of washing machine slowely up.
In 1920, the refrigerator showed rose up to 0 and 90 percentage by the end of 1960.Percentage of vacuum cleaner was increased and showed linear proportion from 30 percentage in 1920, and 100 percentage by 2000.
In contrast, Refrigerator in 1920 was 0 percentage and uniformly surge to 90 percentage in 1960, While showed uniformly to 100 percentgae,frpm 1980 to 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping at only 119 words. Furthermore, the content fails to fully address all parts of the task. While the introduction attempts to outline the scope of the line graph, the reporting of main features is severely limited and contains numerous factual errors and contradictions. For example, the student writes that the refrigerator 'showed rose up to 0' in 1920 and then confuses data points across categories. The overview of trends is underdeveloped, and key features such as the drop in housework hours are entirely omitted, leaving the task only partially and minimally addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the response is disjointed, lacking a clear overall progression. Ideas are presented in isolated, disconnected sentences rather than forming a coherent overview and detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with single sentences acting as separate paragraphs. While some basic cohesive devices like 'In contrast' are attempted, referencing and logical linking between sentences are faulty and mechanical, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information across the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors that cause difficulty for the reader. There are several spelling and word-form errors, such as 'ownershio', 'slowely', and 'percentage', alongside awkward word choices like 'Percentage home device' and 'uniformly surge'. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic topic of the charts, and attempts at describing trends rely heavily on repetitive, inaccurate lexical phrases that strain comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, and prepositions, such as 'appliances of vacuum cleaner was increased', 'the refrigerator showed rose up', and 'frpm 1980 to 2019'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also handled poorly, with missing capitalisation and comma splices. These frequent errors disrupt the flow and occasionally distort the intended meaning of the sentences.
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