Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart demonstrate information about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and time spent doing housework at homes in country in years between 1920 and 2019.
Overall, the refrigerator spike at the highest point of percentage around 100% then washing machine and vaccum cleaner. Vaccum cleaner also jump up to 100% While,the washing machine show lower spike then those two around 75%. And the number of hours drop between year 1920 to 2019 around 40%.
In 1920, the refrigerator at its lower point of percentage then after gap of 20 year it spike constantly up to 100% While the washing machine in year 1920 they are stand around 40% and after gap of 40 year it reaches up to 70% then drop around 5% in 1980 and increase with stable speed up to 2019 approximatly 9%. Vaccum cleaner at the start it stand around 30% then it jump constantly upto 100%.
Furthermore, the use of home appliances per week hours in 1920 is around 50% at it drop significantly upto 40% in 2019 in country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main trends shown in the charts, such as the rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the coverage is partial and lacks precise selection of data. For instance, the opening overview states that the refrigerator spiked to around 100% and mentions the washing machine and vacuum cleaner, but the details provided are limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as claiming the washing machine increased to 'approximatly 9%' in 2019. The ideas remain under-developed, with mechanical descriptions of individual years rather than a cohesive summary of overall trends and key comparisons. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to select more accurate data points and present a clearer, more fully supported overview of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some organization, attempting to separate the introduction, body details, and conclusion into paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. The transitions between sentences feel abrupt and mechanical, relying on repetitive phrases like 'after gap of 20 year' or 'at the start it stand around'. Cohesive devices are used inadequately or inaccurately, and referencing is sometimes confusing, as seen in sentences like 'Vaccum cleaner also jump up to 100% While,the washing machine show lower spike'. Paragraphing is also somewhat haphazard, mixing general overview statements with specific data points. To improve, the writer should ensure a logical flow of information with clear, varied transitional markers and well-structured paragraphs that guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic words and phrases such as 'spike', 'jump up', and 'stand around'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word forms that sometimes cause difficulty for the reader, for example, writing 'the refrigerator spike at the highest point of percentage' instead of 'reached a peak', or using 'approximatly 9%' when describing a percentage near 75%. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'vaccum'. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their lexical range to include more precise, less common vocabulary related to data trends and ensure accurate collocations when describing statistical changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response utilizes a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing verbs or prepositions (e.g., 'the refrigerator at its lower point', 'housework at homes in country'), incorrect verb tenses and forms (e.g., 'The chart demonstrate', 'the washing machine in year 1920 they are stand'), and punctuation errors. These persistent errors often strain the reader and cause confusion. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex grammatical structures while improving basic accuracy in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and article usage.
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